L.G. IDEAS: IDEAS AND DETAIL
S.O.S
I can write an idea
I can add detail that
explains my idea further
I can add an example that explains my idea further
Elebra:)
They are found in New Zealand and only in the North Island. They
were first found in the North Island in New Zealand and that was when they all
started coming to New Zealand.
It has tusks like an elephant. It has a
trunk that they use to squirt out water to wash itself.
It eats really green grass it runs REALLY, REALLY
fast .
It only likes girls company because it only comes in girls and
it makes really loud noises to contact other Elebras.
These creatures are a must see. Elebra’s a must see.
By Aysha
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Hi Aysha
ReplyDeleteI like the describing words for example black and white stripes.
I like that you remembered the full stops.
Next time I think you should put a little bit more detail to your story.
From Reece.
Hi Aysha
ReplyDeleteI like the way you said that they only like girls.
I like the way you started with a capital letter for example An Elebra
Next you could add another sentence to the hook in so that it longer and introduces the animal in an interesting way.
From Charlize
HI Aysha
ReplyDeleteI like the way you said that they only like girls.
example they only love to play with girls.
I like that you remembered full stops and capital letters.
next time I think you could add a little bit more into the hook in.
from Charlize
HI Aysha
ReplyDeleteI like you said that they only like girls.
Example they love girls.
I like the way you remembered full stops and capital letters.
Next time you could add a little bit more into the hook in.
From charlize